jen69
Content:[28/30] I cringe whenever a diary with the numbers 69 comes up in it. Normally the diarist is some angsty individual bitching about something. However, you seem to have steered clear of that stereotype, and power to you! Your writing has gotten SO MUCH better in the last few entries. I don't really rely on your first entries in order to review your diary, but even ones from a few weeks/months ago were not as emotionally powerful as the recent ones. The recent ones have made great reading, have been much more engrossing and have had a readable element, as opposed to the times where your writing verges on tedium.
This step is only going to take your writing further, and it's obvious that you are extremely intelligent, with an individual writing style. Congratulations. however, I only award full marks if there is something sincerely individualistic about the writing, and you don't have that. You need to find one thing that really epitomises who you ate, and somehow connect that through your writing to make your writing part of you. Only you hold the answers as to how to do that, but that is my advice for making this diary better. You may think it's a bit wanky, but that's what I keep thinking of when I read your diary.
Layout:[17/25] These points are awarded on the fact that this diary is neat, the colours are co-ordinated and it is well maintained and reflects part of you somewhat. Like the other diary I just reviewed, I personally hate this layout anf think the person in the photo needs to get some eyebrows. What might suit you more would be a picture like that, which is very film noir...the big eye shots from the 40s and thereabouts. Maybe you could get a picture from that time, and base your layout around the black and white film era. That would be cool. Rather than the pink ,which doesnt really have anything to do with the picture, other than the fact that I assume you like pink.
Update:[10/10] Often enough for me, of course I allow for people to have lives in between updating their diary. Great length.
Extras:[9/10] I don't like this naming links by something else, btu it seems to be working for you. There are numerous extras, and the extra time spent on this site is evident. Quotes, buddies, rings, reviews, links, hang outs, sitemeter.
Errors:[10/10]Notta one.
Bonus:[2/5] There is no real synthesis between the writing and the layout....there is nothing that is really worthy of bonus points, however your diary is much better than the average schmuck's one, so I think you deserve some points for that.
Contact:[4/5] Notes, email, guestbook. msn.
Returning:[5/5] Yes.
Total: 86/100 Reviewed by Kathleen
