mpeacock
Content: [24/30] You say that you miss the days when you used to think up clever entries. I see the noteable difference between your more recent entries and your older ones...however your entries contain a sense of wisdom, intellect, humour and individuality.
Your entries, however are short and lack alot of detail and are not as engaging as they should be in order to receive better marks. I read all your entries with interest...but I did not feel compelled to keep going. This is purely the case in your recent ones, they don't come across as particularly personal. Rather, they have degraded themselves into little bemusements of the day, a short recap of events. Your witty commentary of the day is not as prominent as it once was, and this is what is pulling your diary down somewhat. I can personally relate to your life a little bit, which is what kept me intrigued. Your drama is such a huge part of your life...and so are your classes and your updates on these interest, but you don't reflect. Instead, you just retell. And I realise this may have to do with a hectic life at the moment, but I have to mark you on what I read.
Some of your shorter entries are still unique and interesting, such as this one click which merely consists of a few lines. But this reflection which optimises your writing ability is missing in the great majority of your diary. This is unfortunate. I'm assuming that your diary will reassume to its once fantastic state when life gets back on track, so I will make sure to return then.
Layout:[24/25] I really like this layout. Neat, user friendly and I think that it reflects on the personality of you. It's got a single image...however, I am unsure about the photos used of you down the bottom. They have changed the centre of the page, which tends to make it look a bit messy. I would suggest starting a photo page, like a yearbook kind of thing, where you can put all your photos there. Or perhaps use the recent photos of you in a layout of some description. I have to take marks off for the photos placement because it's untidy, but other than that it's a great layout! You also need to change your archives layout, it's a bit dated :)
Updates:[10/10] Every day or every two days with multiples. I have no complaints here.
Extras:[4/10] Fans page and photos is about as deep as this extras section gets. The entries contain the insight into the writer, however things such as cast pages are missing to know who you are talking about for any new reader who comes along. Yes, there is poetry, fiction and other such things within your diary, however, they are not labelled or easily accessible, forcing me to count them as entries rather than extras. My suggestions for your page to optimise the skills you have, and to make your life more readable, would be:
-Make a cast page
-Make a biography page
-Put all your photos into one page
-Have a page which links to all your entries with poetry or fiction in them.
-You desperately need a page with all the links to reviews...I couldn't find a link to review world, but I have reviewed you anyway.
-Put all your quizzes onto a page
This can all easily be done with only using one link on the main page, and then linking from there. I know this is alot of work, but it will be good.
Errors:[6/10] No link to us. Other than, there is no broken links or anything else.
Bonus:[5/5] Harmonising your entries with your photos, and your layout get extra credit. I really thought that was one of the trademarks of your diary.
Contact:[5/5] Notes, email, guestbook. Sure, not lots of ways to contact you but no-one likes to get stalked.
Returning:[1/5] Maybe, when things get back on track. As it is at the moment, I wouldn't return.
Total: 79/100 Reviewed by Kathleen
